infinimitsu In the post in the beginning of this thread Realcucumber mentions about sending him stuff to review i believe, you could also try and post on eroscripts, though to be fair from reading one of the users there (sentinel iirc) a lot of times people get so "caught up" in the moment that they cant really offer good feedback,
and i feel ya on the time it takes, I've been working on the rough draft of a Video for three days, and still have roughly 35-40 minutes left. (and this is just for the rough draft stage, I still have to go through to fine tune motions, and tweak any gaps that I may have missed) It really makes ya appreciate the efforts RealCucumber and other Scripters have gone through to produce 700+ scripts so far, hopefully with great dedication and patience we too will one day be in that club.