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Narrative problems, etc.
One easy means of addressing narrative deficiency would be to delay the period between when the video starts and when the hard-core sex begins.
1) Why do these scenes often begin with women in prostitute attire? Good porn requires delayed gratification, or rather the option to jump right to the dirty bits or to appreciate the setting and mood of a scene. There should be an element of strip tease and slow, suspenseful reveal. The recent film with Ginger Grey, though set at a strip club, was a good start. Although the similar stripper-themed episode with Ariel Darling had potential, the idea of suspenseful cinema in porn focuses on the female lead who is to be stripped and exposed. The film, though with a fine story, lacked focus on the protagonist.
2) Prolong the period where the female is naked and the male is clothed. That's where JAV excels above much of the American porn. By extending this period you have greater opportunity for a sense of connection to develop.
3) Use literature and film as your inspiration. If the viewer has an awareness of cinematic context from other experiences, your work in direction and production should be much easier.
